Authors craft is something that authors need. Also, the reader needs to like the kind of craft. For me, I love it when the author goes into a lot of detail when there is an actiony part of the book. Like say there was a fight and someones arm got sliced open, it would say something like ” When the blade struck his arm, it cut through the skin and muscle right to the bone. While blood was pouring out, he screamed in agonizing pain.” Something like that, so you can get a lot of images in your head.
To me, something that is not good is like…”They had to get to the trenches before the guns shot them. When they got in the trenches, it was cold. They needed to sleep too.”
Something like that is completely trash to me. I had no joy even writing that, ahah. Its even more boring to read it a second time. In my book there are lots of O.K. writing. It was pretty hard to pick out a bad part in it, and it was also pretty difficult to pick out a good part.
My good part is,”he opened the car door and was about to get out when a woman appeared on the porch. A slender woman with big sad eyes. Thomas settled back in his seat. Matt and his step-father turned toward the woman.” That is agood part because it describes what the woman generally looks like. It said she had a slender build, which means slim. She also had big eyes, big sad eyes. Giving it the sense that she was either sad or disappointed.
A bad piece of writing that I have found in this book,”Ross stared at Thomas, then at me. Then he shook his head.” I really don’t like how it has so many “And then.” It kind of defeats the purpose of trying to write good. The author could have used so many other words. Unless they were in fact trying to make it sound boring.
